by Chelsea Bennett
Webtoon Comic Script
Revised 01/22/2014
CHARACTER NOTES
NURSE: Neurotic,
small pupils, brown hair carefully put into a braid, lanky, glasses, very neat
and put together
OLD MAN: Aged man
in nursing home, gets around in a electronic chair, very friendly face, has a
false eye.
OFFICER 1: Ebony
woman with curves and a friendly face.
OFFICER 2: Tall
man, rugged face.
ART NOTES
The style of this comic will
be that of an online Korean webtoon. This makes it easy to seamlessly scroll
between panels, put the reader into the story as they scroll down (good for
tablets, phones, and blogs). Ideally, would like to have it seem dark and inky
in style, with very few spot color to give it the right mood.
Panel 1
Outside shot of old
building in a pretty well off American neighborhood.
CAPTION: It is
impossible to say how first the idea entered my brain; but once conceived, it
haunted me day and night.
Panel 2-4
Vignette of NURSE
taking care of OLD MAN, reading to him, feeding him, helping him with his pills
CAPTION: Object there
was none. Passion there was none. I loved the old man. He had never wronged me.
He had never given me insult. For his gold I had no desire.
Panel 5
Creepy OLD MAN eye
shot
CAPTION: it was his
eye!
Panel 6
Reaction - NURSE
becomes pale and frightened
Panel 7
Reflection of OLD MAN
in her eyes
CAPTION: I made up my
mind to rid myself of the eye forever.
Panel 8
NURSE checking old
man's pulse in bed.
CAPTION: Now this is
the point. You fancy me mad.
Panel 9
NURSE closes room
door with a creepy smile.
CAPTION: Madmen know
nothing.
Panel 10
Shot of the clock
striking midnight.
CAPTION: But you
should have seen me.
Panel 11-14
Vignette of NURSE
walking quietly through the halls of the dark house, opening the OLD MAN's room
door, peeking her head in, letting a ray of light fall over his sleeping
figure.
CAPTION: You should
have seen how wisely I proceeded - with what caution - with what foresight -
with what dissimulation I went to work!
Panel 15
OLD MANs sleeping,
eyes are closed.
Panel 16
Next Day, OLD MAN
sitting up in bed looking out window
Panel 17
NURSE enters with
morning pills and water, smiling broadly and cheerfully
1. Good morning, sir!
2. Did you sleep
well?
Panel 18
Close up of OLD MAN
taking his pills
Panel 19
That night; NURSE
slowly opening door
CAPTION: Upon the
eighth night I was more than usually cautious in opening the door.
Panel 20
Nurse peeking into
the room.
CAPTION: To think
that there I was and he not even to dream of my secret deeds or thoughts.
SFX small quiet giggling
Panel 21
OLD MAN sits up in
bed
Panel 22
OLD MAN pov of the
darkness
1. Who's there?
Panel 23
Darkness and silence
Panel 24
SFX Clock ticking
Panel 25
Close up of OLD MAN
eyes wide in absolute terror and sweat
(added dark panels
and sfx of crashes)
Panel 26-28
Shot of floor panels,
Shot of blood draining down a tub, shot of NURSE wiping her hands
Panel 29
NURSE in bathroom
SFX knocking at the
door
SFX stroke of
midnight
Panel 30
NURSE opens the door
to two OFFICERs
Panel 31
OFFICER 1:
"Excuse me, Ma'am. A shriek had been heard by a neighbor."
OFFICE 2: "We
are here to check the premises of any foul play."
Panel 32
NURSE smiles and leads
the two OFFICERS inside
1. Welcome, please
come in.
Panel 33
NURSE walks OFFICERS
down hallway
1. My neighbor must have heard me, I was
having bad nightmares.
2. I never like being
alone in the house, the OLD MAN went out of the country.
3. Please search as
much as you like.
Panel 34-36
OFFICERS check
various places for forced entry and if any valuables were disturbed.
Panel 37
NURSE lets them relax
in the living room, they begin to chat
Panel 38
While chatting, NURSE
gets sweaty and pale and fidgety
CAPTION: My head
ached, and I fancied a ringing in my ears but the noise was not within my ears
Panel 39
SFX Thumping
heartbeat
Nurse starts to
stride around room
Officers think its
amusing
CAPTION: Was it
possible they didn’t hear it?
Panel 40
SFX thumping
heartbeat sound gets bigger
Officers are smiling
CAPTION: Almighty God! - no, no! They heard! - they
suspected! - they knew! –
Panel 41
NURSE grabs her chair
and grinds it against the floorboards while she is still freaking out.
CAPTION: they were
making a mockery of my horror!
Panel 42
SFX bigger thumps
take up most of the frame
NURSE rips out her
hair and screams
CAPTION: louder!
louder! louder! louder!
Panel 43
1. I admit the deed! - tear up the planks! here, here! -
It is the beating of his hideous heart!’
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