This was pretty much the way I broke down everything:
Plot Idea
Anonymous indie game makes people commit suicide
Game is a simple fantasy FPS MMO
GM targets victim and fills their computer with disturbing cryptic messages and images, brainwashing victim into suicide
Cops hire a hacker to find out who is responsible
Bribe hacker with jail
Hacker is actually taking care of a bedridden mother
Villain: GameMaste is a girl that always got put down and harassed by other gamers, she takes form of a scary man in game
End: Hacker mocks up a fake male student ID from data collected to lure in GM. GM takes bate. GM and Hacker face off in the game. Hacker overrides GM, rendering the software useless. GM is confused and tries to escape when she realizes what happened.
Cover page:
A dead kid in computer chair with computer glowing (only source of light) his eyes wide in terror
Page 2
- (full page) All over news "Horrific scenes" "Local teenager commits suicide" "15th case this month" "Cops are suspecting foul play"
Page 3
- Hacker works through already claimed victim records
- All victims are young male students who play pc games
- Hacker gripes about how tedious this is
- flashback of cops giving assignment to hacker in interrogation room
Page 4
- hacker automatically refuses to help
- cop threatens
- Hacker still refuses, saying he doesn't care if some kids commit suicide
- other cop with 15 years in jail
- hacker reluctantly takes the case
Page 5
- hacker and cops meet with friends of victims
- all he finds out are victims were pretty normal students
- all of them say the same thing, none of the victims were the kind that you'd expect kill themselves
- one friend points hacker to an indie game he knows his friend last played
- hacker takes game home
Page 6
- Hacker is sitting at home looking at the burned cd that has the game on it
- flashback
- hacker is taking care of sick mother
- mother warns him of his criminal activity
- hacker tells her everything will be fine
- panel of hacker holding the case file as he leaves
Page 7
- Hacker codes through game
- Game is a simple fantasy FPS MMO
- Nothing special
- Hacker creates a fake account
- Hacker starts playing game normally
Page 8
- GM appears, giant monster like creature unlike most of the characters in game, p intimidating
- GM starts insulting hacker
- hacker talks shit like a teenager would
- GM realizes they can't overtake Hacker's computer
- Hacker laughs at GM
Page 9
- GM is confused and realizes its a trap
- Hacker tells GM he has to only put in a few codes and he will reveal all info
- GM reveals herself as a young girl, crying, saying she didn't mean to harm anyone she was just trying to get back at men who abused her over games
